Note: This is a Worlds Apart Alternate Universe story.

The Monster and the Maiden: chapter 01, part II
Quote from Journal of Edmond le Strange

Studying his friend's back, Edmond swore that whatever Rafe decided would not affect him. It was probably easier to be without friends anyway. They would just be a distraction as he searched for a way to cure himself. And there had to be a cure, right? Every curse could be unraveled by a counter-curse, the trick was discovering it.

Though he dreaded not being able to find the counter-curse, he took solace in daydreaming about various ways to take revenge on his former master and friend—Koryll Bladestorm. The blood mage had ruined Edmond's life when he removed the death curse that another mage had put on Edmond and replaced it with a new curse that had made Edmond into whatever he was now.

True, he would have been dead now without Koryll's intervention, but at least he would not have to drink the blood of humanoids to maintain his own existence.

The aspect he hated most about his new lifestyle was how much he actually enjoyed the act of taking blood. The velvety feel of his victim's hot skin beneath his lips and tongue as he drew their blood into his mouth. The way the flavor of it exploded over his tongue like the most savory wine he had ever tasted. The ecstasy that flooded through him, causing his skin to tingle and his hardened arousal to press almost painfully against the zipper of his pants, as his victim moaned in blissful abandonment in his arms.

He could only imagine what it would be like to have sex during a feeding. He thought he would most likely be overwhelmed with pleasure.

And that is what scared him the most.

Would he be so overcome with sensations that he would give into the temptation to draw every last drop of blood from his victim? He knew that the bestial side of him would never be fully satisfied until that happened—until he made a kill. It was a line he never wanted to cross but he also feared that it was only a matter of time before he lost control of the beast and took a life.

Finally, Rafe broke the heavy silence. "So, where are your fangs?"

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27 Responses to “The Monster and the Maiden: Ch. 01, Part II”

  1. Jade says:

    Fantastic. Superb. Awesome.

  2. Tanya says:

    What Jade said! Edmond's got a bad boy side hidden away there …. ;)*tips bucket of ice over her head* I can't wait to find out more regarding Master Bladestorm – is he really bad as Edmond thinks, or does he want to help as Rafe says? And is it just me, or is there a similarity in looks between Rafe and Alec?

  3. Lisa says:

    Edmond's description of feeding is arousing. Well-written, I can't wait for more!

  4. amalinaball says:

    I can only follow Jade's and Tanya's leads. This was fantastic, superb, awesome and more. Utterly brilliant, basically. ;)
    There's something about Rafe that does indeed seem similar to Alec, and in a way Edmond reminds me of Tahlvin. But I am probably completely wrong and just making too many assumptions (as usual).
    I wonder how the dinner will go? I hope Edmond won't get the sudden "need to feed" while they're out!

  5. Alimah Kali says:

    *fans self* Oh my… Well…! This is certainly a lovely episode to wake up to! I read the first page and couldn't stop blushing afterward. I won't lie. I read that page at least twice. LOL!

    Can't wait for the next part! ^_^

  6. Kara says:

    Thank you so much, girls! It's always nerve-racking to post a new story so I'm glad you're liking it so far.

    Tanya, we won't be seeing Master Bladestorm in the flesh for awhile yet; however, I'll be giving some more clues as to who he is in the next few chapters. As for Rafe, now that you mention it, he and Alec do look a bit like they could be brothers. But, that's entirely coincidental although it does give me an idea. Maybe Rafe is his… Ack…I better shut up now. ;)

    Lisa, I had a lot of fun writing the part about Edmond's feeding. I definitely want there to be something sensual and almost sexual about the experience.

    Amalinaball, as with Rafe, any physical resemblance to other characters is coincidental. As for their similarity in personalities, well I'll let you make that decision once you get to know the characters a little better.

    The dinner: I'm not covering it in the story, but I can tell you that Edmond behaved himself. You really only have to worry about Edmond when his fangs grow back in. *cue ominous music* ;)

    Instead, Rafe and he spent a nice night catching up with each other. Rafe even steered clear of talking about Master Bladestorm (at least after the first time he brought him up. It didn't go over well with Edmond).

    Alimah, I was blushing and giggling when I wrote it! I have a feeling I'm going to be doing that a lot in this story.

  7. Jenny says:

    wow, that was awesome! Kara you are soo talented:)

  8. Jenny says:

    oh, forgot to ask…lol…that wooden looking ceiling in the beginning of the chapter??? been looking for ages for something like that…..thanks again for the wonderful update Kara:D

  9. Kara says:

    Hi, Jenny, and thank you very much! :)

    The ceiling is part of Dektora's Malkavian mansion ceiling tiles recolors. You can find it at MTS2. The whole set is awesome.

  10. decorgal says:

    "The ecstasy that flooded through him, causing his skin to tingle and his hardened arousal to press almost painfully against the zipper of his pants, as his victim moaned in blissful abandonment in his arms."

    Best sentence ever! I'm not just saying that because it's sexual (well, maybe a little) but your descriptive prose is excellent and provokes very strong imagery. I wish I could write like that! Thanks for the timely installment. I'll be looking forward to reading these chapters.

  11. Tanya says:

    Argh, you've got me wondering where you were going with the Rafe and Alec train of thought now :D There's definitely something special about writing feeding scenes. And reading them a few dozen times …..

    *zips mouth before revealing more "interesting" feeding thoughts*

  12. Kara says:

    Aw! Thank you, Decorgal! I really try to work on my descriptive imagery when I write. It's actually kind of hard for me, but I do like how it stimulates the imagination. …No pun intended. ;)

    And, Tanya, I loved your feeding scene in your story too. I agree with you, they are a blast to write. And definitely provide some interesting food for thought. heehee

  13. goodbye_sun says:

    Edmond is not so unemotional and detached as he would obviously like to appear, and Rafe is all squishy inside too. Such beautiful descriptive language, I was eating it up (so to speak).

  14. Mao says:

    Wow, how did I miss this? Very cool. Your images and characters with this remind me a bit of anime–I think it just might be the rugged looks with long hair. Or maybe I'm just regressing back to lost days, haha.

    Edmond's look, in particular, is all sorts of awesome. His expressions speak volumes. I love it!

  15. Kara says:

    Goodbye_sun, I really had a lot of fun writing those two guys. I'm kind of sad that Rafe isn't going to be around again for several more chapters. But, I'm looking forward to introducing some new characters and Rafe will be back someday. ;)

    Thank you, Mao! It's funny that you mention anime as I had just finished watching the wonderful Gankutsuou: The Count of Monte Cristo right before I found the sim that would become Edmond and started writing his story. Not only did Edmond inherit the Count's name, but I actually chose his hairstyle because it reminded me of the Count's flowing locks. :)

  16. Dektora says:

    It's great to have a weekly updated story of yours. Now I can have my fix every mondays ;)
    I love the contrast between Edmond's angelic look and the description of his "monster condition" and the way it feels to feed of humanoids. BTW, as already said above, loved the way you turned that sentence. Very sexual and poetic at the same time.
    Now I am really intrigued about the rest of the story. Is it all planned out already? Do you know approximatly how many chapters there will be or are you still in the process of organising the plot?

    PS: thanks for the compliments on my ceiling tiles :) It always make me happy to spot some of my CC in your stories.

  17. Kara says:

    Thank you, Dektora! I'm excited to be able to update once a week as well. It's really helped too that I have so many chapters written already. I don't know how many chapters it will be in total, but I do know exactly how it's going to end and what I want to happen between now and then. I'm really at the point where I just have to finish writing (and simming) it.

    And, your CC is perfect for this story! Edmond's house is full of it.

    Also, please let me know if I make any glaring mistakes with Edmond's French. I'm depending on my high school French lessons and high school was sooo long ago. I'm trying to use it sparingly so I don't embarrass myself too much. ;)

  18. Dektora says:

    So far so good! Feel free to e-mail me or pm me though if you have any french related questions, small or big. I'll be happy to help.

    And as I forgot to wish it to you in my first post, good luck with this new adventure :D

  19. Brenda says:

    Wow, this just keeps getting better! You keep writing, I'll keep reading!

  20. Cadie says:

    Hello Kara.
    Ive been reading your stories since…erm…August 2007 (yes im sorry it took me this long to work up the courage to comment), and may I just say you are one of the story writers whos stories ive read. Seriously, you inspire me to write because your use of language is so…( cannot think of words to follow up sentence). And I am glad that ou are now updating every week because your work provides me with good entertainment throught reading, and not just any reading, reading involving pictures of my favourite game. So for that I thank you.

    I love this new story, and may i say IM IN LOVE WITH EDMOND! He's definately something. :D You work never ceases to amaze me!

  21. Kara says:

    Well, I will definitely keep writing, Brenda so it's great to know that I'll have at least one reader around for the long haul. ;)

    And, Cadie, wow… I'm actually kind of speechless now and don't really know what to say other than "thank you so much"! You've really made me blush. I hope you continue to enjoy Edmond's story as well as Worlds Apart (whenever I get around to updating that…haha).

  22. Jenny says:

    I can't wait to see the maiden..whenever she will appear…..

  23. Anghard says:

    Oh Goodness. I was almost in tears myself at the end there. I really feel for poor Edmond and I was very surprised at how calmly and rationally Rafe took it. I think he proved himself a truly valuable friend.

    You did a fantastic job on showing the conversation through the caps too, although with your writing, I have to say, I wouldn't have noticed if it had just been the writing. You painted the scene very well and I could picture it clearly.

    The images just enhance what you already have, a beautiful accompaniment to your story.

  24. Kara says:

    I think Edmond severely underestimated Rafe. His friend is has experience with strange and horrible things after being the bodyguard of Koryll for a few years now. Rafe was more upset that Edmond didn't trust him enough. I'm glad they worked it out though. It's nice for Edmond to have such a loyal friend.

    And thank you very much for the compliment on my writing. :) I've tried to write less descriptively since I have the pictures to take up that burden, but I can't really seem to be able to write any other way. haha

  25. E. Black says:

    It has been so long since I've read one of your stories, Kara. My head has been everywhere but here. This is a brilliant little gem.

  26. Beth says:

    I don't know how you could stop writing descriptively — kind of like a dog trying to turn into a cat. Which reminds me I adore the "retractable" line! Made me laugh out loud!

    Love the shot with the yellow candles on the table, which seem to throw a golden light on the room.

    Particularly appreciate the fact that your characters have such distinctive and complex personalities. Edmond reacts almost like a guy in his late teens or early 20's — Rafe, much older.

    Wonderful, again, as usual.

  27. xtinabobina says:

    I really, really like Rafe. he's got a classy. suave dimeanor that really attracts me.

 

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