The Monster and the Maiden: Ch. 01, Part II
January 21st, 2008
"You're being silly, Edmond, and stubborn. And, while we're at it you're being very childish as well. The master is a bit…unorthodox but he's a brilliant mage. If anyone can help you, he can."
Edmond remained silent; he could think of no way to respond to Rafe that would not indeed sound silly, stubborn and childish.
Rafe dragged a scarred and callused hand through his scraggly hair. "Very well. I'll concede for now. You're impossible when you get this way. But don't think I've surrendered.
"So, do you still eat normal food? Or is it blood or nothing but blood."
Glad for the change in topic, Edmond laughed. "Non. I really only have to have blood every so often. I still eat normally."
"Well then," said Rafe, jumping up from the loveseat. Playing the polite host, Edmond stood too. "I'm headed back to Paris tomorrow—Master Bladestorm can't get along without me—but how about we go out to dinner tonight. It'll be like old times."
A pleasant warmth that Edmond had forgotten about in the year he had isolated himself spread through him. "I would like that."
Rafe cocked his head as if studying him. "You look like death-warmed over. I hope you know that."
"When did you say you were leaving?"
Rafe chuckled but then Edmond noticed a suspicious wetness in his friend's eyes as Rafe dragged him into a rough hug. "Don't you ever run where I can't find you again. You must always let me know where you are. Even if all you want is to be left alone."
The wetness seemed to have migrated into Edmond's eyes. With a voice made hoarse by his tightening throat he said, "I will. Je suis désolé, mon ami. I am sorry."
27 Responses to “The Monster and the Maiden: Ch. 01, Part II”
January 21st, 2008 at 12:17 am
Fantastic. Superb. Awesome.
January 21st, 2008 at 8:13 am
What Jade said! Edmond's got a bad boy side hidden away there …. ;)*tips bucket of ice over her head* I can't wait to find out more regarding Master Bladestorm – is he really bad as Edmond thinks, or does he want to help as Rafe says? And is it just me, or is there a similarity in looks between Rafe and Alec?
January 21st, 2008 at 8:24 am
Edmond's description of feeding is arousing. Well-written, I can't wait for more!
January 21st, 2008 at 8:28 am
I can only follow Jade's and Tanya's leads. This was fantastic, superb, awesome and more. Utterly brilliant, basically. 😉
There's something about Rafe that does indeed seem similar to Alec, and in a way Edmond reminds me of Tahlvin. But I am probably completely wrong and just making too many assumptions (as usual).
I wonder how the dinner will go? I hope Edmond won't get the sudden "need to feed" while they're out!
January 21st, 2008 at 9:08 am
*fans self* Oh my… Well…! This is certainly a lovely episode to wake up to! I read the first page and couldn't stop blushing afterward. I won't lie. I read that page at least twice. LOL!
Can't wait for the next part! ^_^
January 21st, 2008 at 9:09 am
January 21st, 2008 at 9:52 am
wow, that was awesome! Kara you are soo talented:)
January 21st, 2008 at 9:54 am
oh, forgot to ask…lol…that wooden looking ceiling in the beginning of the chapter??? been looking for ages for something like that…..thanks again for the wonderful update Kara:D
January 21st, 2008 at 10:01 am
January 21st, 2008 at 1:06 pm
"The ecstasy that flooded through him, causing his skin to tingle and his hardened arousal to press almost painfully against the zipper of his pants, as his victim moaned in blissful abandonment in his arms."
Best sentence ever! I'm not just saying that because it's sexual (well, maybe a little) but your descriptive prose is excellent and provokes very strong imagery. I wish I could write like that! Thanks for the timely installment. I'll be looking forward to reading these chapters.
January 21st, 2008 at 2:27 pm
Argh, you've got me wondering where you were going with the Rafe and Alec train of thought now 😀 There's definitely something special about writing feeding scenes. And reading them a few dozen times …..
*zips mouth before revealing more "interesting" feeding thoughts*
January 21st, 2008 at 8:02 pm
January 22nd, 2008 at 3:24 am
Edmond is not so unemotional and detached as he would obviously like to appear, and Rafe is all squishy inside too. Such beautiful descriptive language, I was eating it up (so to speak).
January 23rd, 2008 at 6:31 am
Wow, how did I miss this? Very cool. Your images and characters with this remind me a bit of anime–I think it just might be the rugged looks with long hair. Or maybe I'm just regressing back to lost days, haha.
Edmond's look, in particular, is all sorts of awesome. His expressions speak volumes. I love it!
January 23rd, 2008 at 9:24 am
January 24th, 2008 at 1:28 am
It's great to have a weekly updated story of yours. Now I can have my fix every mondays 😉
I love the contrast between Edmond's angelic look and the description of his "monster condition" and the way it feels to feed of humanoids. BTW, as already said above, loved the way you turned that sentence. Very sexual and poetic at the same time.
Now I am really intrigued about the rest of the story. Is it all planned out already? Do you know approximatly how many chapters there will be or are you still in the process of organising the plot?
PS: thanks for the compliments on my ceiling tiles 🙂 It always make me happy to spot some of my CC in your stories.
January 24th, 2008 at 8:12 am
January 24th, 2008 at 10:05 am
So far so good! Feel free to e-mail me or pm me though if you have any french related questions, small or big. I'll be happy to help.
And as I forgot to wish it to you in my first post, good luck with this new adventure 😀
January 25th, 2008 at 8:13 pm
Wow, this just keeps getting better! You keep writing, I'll keep reading!
January 26th, 2008 at 12:16 pm
Hello Kara.
Ive been reading your stories since…erm…August 2007 (yes im sorry it took me this long to work up the courage to comment), and may I just say you are one of the story writers whos stories ive read. Seriously, you inspire me to write because your use of language is so…( cannot think of words to follow up sentence). And I am glad that ou are now updating every week because your work provides me with good entertainment throught reading, and not just any reading, reading involving pictures of my favourite game. So for that I thank you.
I love this new story, and may i say IM IN LOVE WITH EDMOND! He's definately something. 😀 You work never ceases to amaze me!
January 27th, 2008 at 12:13 pm
January 27th, 2008 at 9:19 pm
I can't wait to see the maiden..whenever she will appear…..
February 5th, 2008 at 11:16 pm
Oh Goodness. I was almost in tears myself at the end there. I really feel for poor Edmond and I was very surprised at how calmly and rationally Rafe took it. I think he proved himself a truly valuable friend.
You did a fantastic job on showing the conversation through the caps too, although with your writing, I have to say, I wouldn't have noticed if it had just been the writing. You painted the scene very well and I could picture it clearly.
The images just enhance what you already have, a beautiful accompaniment to your story.
February 5th, 2008 at 11:29 pm
February 6th, 2008 at 9:29 am
It has been so long since I've read one of your stories, Kara. My head has been everywhere but here. This is a brilliant little gem.
March 23rd, 2008 at 12:52 pm
I don't know how you could stop writing descriptively — kind of like a dog trying to turn into a cat. Which reminds me I adore the "retractable" line! Made me laugh out loud!
Love the shot with the yellow candles on the table, which seem to throw a golden light on the room.
Particularly appreciate the fact that your characters have such distinctive and complex personalities. Edmond reacts almost like a guy in his late teens or early 20's — Rafe, much older.
Wonderful, again, as usual.
September 28th, 2009 at 6:27 pm
I really, really like Rafe. he's got a classy. suave dimeanor that really attracts me.