Chapter 01: I for an I

July 17th, 2007

Again, silence reigned over the clearing. She had just decided to peek around the edge of the wall when she heard a soft click like that of a handgun's hammer being cocked.

She glimpsed their shoes as they walked past her hiding place. Her heart pounded so loudly in her chest that she was surprised it didn't give her away. She kept waiting for them to turn around and see her. But they never did.

Instead, they continued to advance toward the main part of the ruins picking their way along quietly. They soon disappeared into a doorway in the main building.

She waited a minute for them to reemerge. When they did not, she knew that she had to take this chance. Easing herself up from her crouch, she pushed herself away from the wall and froze as their disjointed whisperings floated toward her on the shifting night breeze.

"…con…your idea…ransom…more money…"

"…should have killed her outright?"

"Maybe…mess would never have happened.."

"…can't believe the bitch killed him…"

Then, though she could still hear the timbre of their voices, she could no longer make out specific words and figured they must have moved deeper into the ruins. Though they seemed further away from her now, she still worried that they would come out of the building at any moment and see her fleeing across the clearing.

Shaking her head, she clenched her fist. She was just going to have to take that chance. It wasn't as if she had the luxury of waiting here for her crew to find her. They most likely didn't even know she was missing yet. Hell, even if they did realize she was gone, they wouldn't have the first inkling of where to search for her. No, she was on her own. She'd gotten out of tighter situations than this; she'd do so again.

As she tried to move into the open, she realized her legs refused to budge. Closing her eyes, she bit down on her broken lip and almost gasped in pain as the copper tang of blood flooded her mouth.

Come on, Brandee, she told herself, run!

She opened her eyes, and with a last look at the doorway, left the concealing shadows and ran into the clearing taking care to keep her left arm braced at her side—it seemed to alleviate the pain in her ribs a little.

It was a constant temptation to look over her shoulder to see if they had emerged from the ruins and noticed her flight. But she kept her eyes fastened on the shadowy forest before her as it got closer and closer with each stride.

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24 Responses to “Chapter 01: I for an I”

  1. Kelly says:

    Amazing! When I first saw that girl I thought she looked like Brandee and I was right! Poor girl, getting beat and broken like that! By the way, where did you find her outfit? It looks so real, or maybe it's just the lighting? I knew those two girls were twins or something like that, they both had the same birthmark above their lip and both have 'B' names too. Anywho, fantastic chapter and I absolutely cannot wait until the next one comes out ;-)

    Kara said: Thank you! I'm not sure I'd call Pirate Brandee (as I call her) "poor", but it's kind of sad that she had to go through her debut all beaten up. ;) Her outfit is actually an amalgam of a few outfits. The mesh, boots and gloves are from SynapticSim's Tomb Raider, the shirt is a modified from a Lara Croft outfit I downloaded from MTS2 (but I can't seem to find it anymore), and the pants are from one of the male outfits by Maxis (the one with the long black coat).

  2. Decorgal says:

    That was definitely worth the wait Kara! Despite it being a written story with pictures, I could hear in my mind the action and all the sounds of the story. The pictures and words were so eloquent and did a fantastic job of setting the mood. I have to say the last scene was my favorite with the darkening vision. As always, you know just how to end each chapter- with incredible suspense.

  3. RaShawn says:

    That was brilliant. Worth the wait definitely. I love how you ended the chapter with the fade out.

  4. VJ says:

    Great chapter! I'm so glad you didn't give up on the story. I started to think you might have.

    That was so well written and your pictures are stunning as always. Please don't make me wait as long for the next chapter… *pleading

    VJ

  5. Choco says:

    I was so happy to see Chapter One up. I thought that the first girl looked like Brandee but wasn't too sure if it was her. Much to surprise, not only was it her, but there's two of her! I can't wait to see how this play out. It seems to me that the curtain of light is a portal to a parallel universe. I guess I'll have to wait and see. The writing and the pictures were superb. Good job. =)

  6. lmfjaxxon says:

    Oh my…a new story! I had to read this, since I loved your other stories and this one is a block buster too! I'm glad to see you are uploading again! This is going to be an interesting read…I hope you update soon :)! Thanks for this cuz now I have another site to read from!

    ~LaTasha~

  7. yicke says:

    Nice, very nice! I love the sense of uneasiness that comes out of it!

    Can't wait for the next update (do I need to wait another year??)

    Kara said: Thank you! And, although chapter two is proving to be quite complicated (at least in the sense of pictures), I will say that there will most likely not be another year wait until the next chapter. I've taken about 1/3 of the pictures needed so far.

  8. Tanya says:

    Brilliant! More than worth the wait :) I wonder what's going to happen to the shot Brandee – will she die or is she just unconscious? Can't wait to find out!

  9. amalinaball says:

    Wow! I was riveted as I read this chapter – it's so nice to be to get back into a story having not read any new material for so long. But it was well worth the wait! :D Now I understand why some of the outtakes from Prologue 02 were telling of the future…muhahaha! Very nicely-written, and such lovely pictures! I wonder why there are two Brandees? Hmm indeed…

  10. jacqueline says:

    wow…
    that is the only word to
    describe how great this chapter is…
    great job.

  11. Alicia says:

    I am clapping my hands with glee at your return! To be honest, I thought you'd vanished for good.

    This new chapter is exquisite…I am forever impressed with your skill and attention to detail. As I was reading, I got lost in the words and actually forgot there were pictures; it was like a movie playing in my head, and then when I finished reading, I had to go back and enjoy the corresponding images.

    Also, the new layout gave me quite a shock when the site started loading. ..That's a good thing.

  12. Pandora Moon says:

    Hi. Yey! you're back!. Hopefully now that this chapter is out of the way the next one will come easier to you. I love the new layout very cool.

    I knew thosse women must be the same person though I wonder what's on the other side of the light?. I guess we'll see in the next chapter.

    Keep Simming!.

    See ya.

  13. buraigabor says:

    i'm happy you back!!!

  14. Kwame says:

    Om gosh this is truly amazing. Your site is now my homepage ^__^. Cant wait for the next update. Keep up the good work

  15. Lisa says:

    Brilliant! I love your effects. Like the others, I'm very glad to see you back.

  16. Mandie says:

    Wow. Just…wow! I loved it! This update was well worth the wait!

  17. sweetcharming says:

    This story is so … unbelievable… great!
    I "discoverd" your page 30 minutes ago and I love it from the first second! ^^ It's swell that you put so much effort in your details and effects. I love the plot, it's really enthralling!
    I'm waiting for the next update!

  18. Verity says:

    Woah! What a comeback! Sorry I hadn't checked in for a while so I didn't realise you were updating again. This is so awesome! I wonder why there were two of them, I hope the first one is going to be alright but somehow it doesn't really look like it. I loved the last sequence of pics when she is losing consciousness. So cool :).

    Also just a quick side note, Mhalwae now has its own domain at http://www.mhalwae.com.

  19. Tiana says:

    Dang I didn't want her to die! She was so awesome! I love her dreads, where did you get them? Shoot she was so badass :( Interesting that there's two of them, I hope the next chapter has some answers, I gotta keep reading!

  20. Kara says:

    Yeah, I really liked that Brandee as well even though she was in it for such a short time. She was very fun to write. :)

    Her dreadlocks are by Nouk and you can get them either at her site or at MTS2.

  21. Anghard says:

    I wondered when I first saw the woman. She did look a lot like Brandee and I was a little surprised Brandee didn't remember those ruins. She went there as a little girl. The mystery deepens!

  22. Beth says:

    Fascinating! I've always loved the concept of "gates" — and you've drawn the concept extremely well.

    Love the opening shots with the car and Brandee on the road! Well, every single shot is a masterpiece, but I really liked those.

  23. JoVonn says:

    I like how all the pictures was taken at night and one could tell there was a bit of moonlight filtering through the dense forest. I could feel Brandee's pain and her fleeing through the trees, heart pounding….

  24. Mousegirl says:

    hello, I must say, I was really instently hooked when reading your stories :3 your pictures are just awsome =D. I was wondering, where did you get the choaker/necklace that pirate brandee is wearing?

    Thank you so much! :D The choker is from RenSim and the necklace is from RoseSims2, I think.

    ~Kara

 

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