The Monster and the Maiden: Ch. 06, Part II
December 15th, 2008
Edmond had turned his back to her and was slumped against the wall as if was the only thing keeping him on his feet. "Leave, Emily," he said with a dull intonation so different from his sensual purr only moments before.
Confused by his sudden retreat and change in attitude, she wiped her fingers on her jeans and took a hesitant step toward him. After lowering her mental defenses and seeing that the gale of magical energy that had whipped around him was now all but dissipated, she even dared to raise a shaking hand and place it with tremulous wariness on his shoulder as if he were a spooked animal that she could calm.
The muscles of his shoulder jumped beneath her touch and he shrank away from her. "Je vous en supplie! Laissez moi tranquille." He seemed to beseech her in a voice made hoarse with desperation.
She lowered her hand to her side and said, "I—I just wanted to make sure—"
He whirled around. Gasping, she reeled away from him as if he had slapped her. Blood—her blood she realized with a lightheadedness that made her vision darken and blur at the edges—painted his lower jaw. His eyes, which were once again the blue of a cloud-laden winter sky heavy with the threat of an out-of-season lightning storm, glinted with a fevered madness. "Allez-vous en immรยฉdiatement!"
Though she couldn't understand what he said, the edge of hysteria that laced his words and the sight of her blood dripping from his chin spurred her fear and sent her racing for the ladder where she scrambled up its rungs.
It wasn't until she was outside, running for the bus stop, that she realized her face was cold with the tears that streaked her cheeks.
Author's Note: Merci beaucoup to Dektora for helping me yet again with the French for this chapter. She has been invaluable to me and to helping give Edmond some added character. Any mistakes that remain are mine alone.
40 Responses to “The Monster and the Maiden: Ch. 06, Part II”
December 15th, 2008 at 3:14 am
Eeeep! Its here. I love the introdctory picture and this has to be the best chapter yet, wow! Does this mean Emily is a vampire now?
December 15th, 2008 at 4:27 am
All i could say or muttered is wow. It breaks my heart seeing Edmond in such pain and frustration in the last few pages.
December 15th, 2008 at 6:52 am
Wow! That was creepy & hot all al the same time!
December 15th, 2008 at 12:14 pm
I was just thinking yesterday how much I wanted to read a new chapter and then saw some pics on flickr which I thought indicated you were working on it. I'm so glad to see another chapter up.
I think up until now, we're seen mostly the 'human' side of Edmund but in this chapter I must admit he was quite creepy. I first thought I knew where the Edmund-Emily dynamics would go but now I'm not so sure. Yes, there is still this uncanny connection between them but I'm not sure my guesses are correct. That's good though- it'll keep me on my toes. :up:
December 15th, 2008 at 12:15 pm
There are a few pictures that I really enjoyed:
the 1st one on the 4th page
the 2nd to the last one of the 5th page
and – the 3rd on the 6th page
I also liked Em's back tattoos.
:XO:
December 15th, 2008 at 4:04 pm
I love the Vampire side of Edmund..and I was scared when he caught Emily. I loved the pictures and the outtakes are always my favorite. You did an excellent job on this chapter..I love how Edmund speaks french sometimes..so romantic :XO: imo! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Bravo! 8)
December 15th, 2008 at 4:40 pm
-Love- the intro picture! This story is turning out great, and this chapter was well worth the wait. ๐ :XO:
December 15th, 2008 at 11:58 pm
Absolutely beautiful, Kara. I was happy to see this on my RSS feeds. <3
The outtakes are delicious.
December 16th, 2008 at 2:08 pm
Great chapter! I just know that when/if these two get together, it will be incredibly HOT! The header shots are proof enough of that…
December 16th, 2008 at 5:37 pm
Oh no! Now she knows his secret. However…I doubt this will keep her away. This only makes it harder for him, though…he seemed so defeated, it was sad to read. This was beautifully written…the emotions that she felt were readily expressed in the your beatifully crafted sentences.
December 18th, 2008 at 8:32 am
December 20th, 2008 at 8:17 am
Wow – this is really getting good! Can't wait to see what happens next – these two seem destined to be together but detirmined to make it as painful as possible getting there. And where do you get all those wonderful clothes?!? The header shots are fantastic!
December 20th, 2008 at 8:04 pm
Kara, that update was beautiful…..I am just about speechless…..
December 21st, 2008 at 12:33 am
รลกara you're the best too!) This chapter so…emotional and…full of something that I can't explain/ But it was brilliant. It's pitty but I don't understant french (( And I don't understand what Edmond says. (
Keep waiting for another chapter ๐
December 21st, 2008 at 9:01 am
December 21st, 2008 at 1:52 pm
Kara, I so glad that you ungerstand my bad English))) Thank you for translation. I like to lern something new about all languages)
Yes I notice that ) And in makes Edmond more reall)
Good Luck )
December 23rd, 2008 at 10:29 pm
Oh my… ๐ฏ
I was expecting in one of the chapters, sooner or later that Emily would be bitten by Edmond. It wouldn't be much of a vampire story if he didn't, but… this chapter sent my heart racing in every page! Every paragraph! Saying it would be amazing isn't enough! And even though I understood only a little of the french (the rest I guessed) it suited each paragraph so precisely I think I might just faint!
To see Edmond lose control as much as he did was… breath-taking. ::-*: I don't even know what to expect anymore. The story has turned in a way I cannot predict, nor do I want to. I enjoyed it so much and I'm SO sorry my comment is like, seriously late but… oh my gosh! ๐ฎ I'm just going to die now! Bye!
December 24th, 2008 at 10:19 am
December 26th, 2008 at 3:41 pm
OMG…well I am really surprised that Edmond managed to reign himself in before he went too far in biting Emily. That really surprised me although it shouldn't have. He certainly found her in a most inopportune time. And now I am curious over the aftershocks this will cause not only for him but for Emily as well.
Your descriptions of their emotions was perfection. I could really feel her utter fear and helplessness as well as Edmond's anguish. I really don't think this will be the last that he sees of Emily. I doubt she is going to let this go. And if her father finds out what happened…that won't be pretty…
December 28th, 2008 at 7:23 pm
Ooooh~ ::-*: About time! Heheh. Any chance of an appearance of that roughishly handsome man from France? ๐
December 29th, 2008 at 1:13 pm
December 30th, 2008 at 12:44 am
Oooh! :XO: I can hardly wait! Finally!
December 30th, 2008 at 11:57 am
tranquill => tranquille!
Au plaisir de t'aider!
December 30th, 2008 at 12:17 pm
Oh wow I love this story o.o Edmond is such an amazing character: so conflicted by emotions, trying to be strong, yet sometimes giving way to despair. I think you captured the emotions very well! And the pictures are, as usual, beautiful. I should not have read this right before coming to tell you my news >.< But I have decided to just break down and make a SimsStory. I have quite a bit of it done and the first update will be around January 4th, and I am so nervous ๐ฎ … and yet I am so excited…
And now that I know what a pain in the butt it is, I wanted to compliment you some more on the way you capture so much emotion in your stories! Now more than ever, you amaze me. :XO: Keep writing!
December 31st, 2008 at 7:59 am
i loved this chapter, it was really good. I can't wait to read the next one. && I love the other headers they all look nice, i can see it probably took a while for you to decide.
December 31st, 2008 at 9:45 am
January 14th, 2009 at 7:41 am
I could help you too for your french if you wanted… cause I am french ๐ ouioui c'est bien vrai! Anyhoo, your story is AMAZING !!
January 14th, 2009 at 9:28 am
January 26th, 2009 at 5:28 am
((( Where is the next chapter ?((
January 30th, 2009 at 4:09 pm
Ohmigosh. I love this story. I think your ability to build sets and pose the sims naturally is probably the most impressive I've seen.
Did you make the dress Emily is wearing in the preview shot?
January 31st, 2009 at 10:07 am
March 7th, 2009 at 11:43 am
You're awesome dude, seriously just…. awesome at writing this8O !!!
Anyway, I hope the writing is coming out smoothly:-) , as I'm reeeally looking forward to reading the next chapter:wink: !!!
Good luck, soldier:idea: !
March 14th, 2009 at 1:20 pm
I'm truly amazed with this story, I love the way you describe so strong scenes and characters with both amazing words and pictures! ๐ :up: I'll stay tuned for more, and I can't wait for this! ๐
And may I ask you which skintones are Emily and Edmond sporting? I guessed Tahlvin's skintone was one from Enayla, did I guess right?
Anyway, keep on the gorgeous job! :XO:
March 14th, 2009 at 2:13 pm
March 18th, 2009 at 12:25 pm
You are incredible, most vampire stories bore me by now because the storyline's too monotone, but yours is so different from all the others that I can't help but sit here a little sad that there's not a chapter more.
Anyway, where did you get Emily's shirt? I'm pretty sure the pants are from Clup Crimson, but I looove that shirt :XO: … please tell me where you got it :halo: …
March 19th, 2009 at 9:35 am
March 27th, 2009 at 7:17 am
Kara – if you do decide to upload that outfit I will definitely be downloading!
May 7th, 2009 at 10:35 am
Ooh I'm loving your story through and through! You're a wonderful story-teller and I adore your characters! Very lovely-written every chapter! Keep it coming and stay awesome! ๐
Ah yeah…one more thing, how did you work on putting tears and blood on your sim? I know, honestly, I'm kind of a beginner. Also, I can't find any more working sites having that kind of costume make-up… ๐ can you help me?
July 31st, 2009 at 8:58 am
Superb.
Une Histoire magnifique, un trรยจs beau travail.
On en veux encore et encore.
A quand la suite avec les sims 2 ?
July 31st, 2009 at 2:23 pm