"What are you doing here?" he ground out, his voice a deep growl. He advanced on her again, moving with a deliberateness that made her think that he was concentrating utterly on his every motion. His fingers were curled into tight fists at his side.

"Answer me," Edmond said when she didn't say anything right away. His voice seemed to have taken on the icy heat of the magical tempest that she knew still raged about him.

"N-nothing, I…" Emily said, her heart in her throat. She scurried backward only to be brought up short as the backs of her thighs slammed into the worktable in the center of the room.

"'Nothing?'" he repeated in a mocking voice as he drew even closer to her. "Breaking into my house—breaking my trust—is 'nothing'?"

His lips drew back from his teeth in an angry snarl that displayed his glistening fangs. Her eyes widened in alarm even as a part of her mind that seemed detached from the horror of the moment said in a smug tone, See…I knew he had fangs.

"No, I…" she began, but then trailed off as she noticed his fanged leer fall into a pained grimace and his strange golden eyes flicker to their more normal shade of blue—though the latter may have just been a trick of the flickering candlelight.

Taking advantage of his momentary distraction, and not caring for the reason behind it, she started to sidle along the edge of the table so that she could slip behind it and use it as a sort of barrier between them.

Edmond's eyes, molten with gold so deep that she knew she must have imagined the shift to blue before, locked onto her sudden movement. With an inhuman howl that turned her legs to jelly, he lunged forward and trapped her arms in his iron grip halting her retreat. Again, she squeaked. God, why couldn't she scream properly? If his intensity and strength hadn't terrified her, she would have been mortified.

His odd, glowing eyes narrowed and his breathing sounded labored. "You wanted to find out why I am like this, non? Why I do not age?"

If only she could reach the small can of mace in her jacket pocket but her arms were anchored at her sides. She squirmed trying to break his hold but his strength seemed uncanny for man of his wiry build—it was like struggling against a rock wall.

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40 Responses to “The Monster and the Maiden: Ch. 06, Part II”

  1. Cadie says:

    Eeeep! Its here. I love the introdctory picture and this has to be the best chapter yet, wow! Does this mean Emily is a vampire now?

  2. karen says:

    All i could say or muttered is wow. It breaks my heart seeing Edmond in such pain and frustration in the last few pages.

  3. Lisa says:

    Wow! That was creepy & hot all al the same time!

  4. Decorgal says:

    I was just thinking yesterday how much I wanted to read a new chapter and then saw some pics on flickr which I thought indicated you were working on it. I'm so glad to see another chapter up.

    I think up until now, we're seen mostly the 'human' side of Edmund but in this chapter I must admit he was quite creepy. I first thought I knew where the Edmund-Emily dynamics would go but now I'm not so sure. Yes, there is still this uncanny connection between them but I'm not sure my guesses are correct. That's good though- it'll keep me on my toes. :up:

  5. Lani says:

    There are a few pictures that I really enjoyed:

    the 1st one on the 4th page
    the 2nd to the last one of the 5th page
    and – the 3rd on the 6th page

    I also liked Em's back tattoos.

    :XO:

  6. Erica says:

    I love the Vampire side of Edmund..and I was scared when he caught Emily. I loved the pictures and the outtakes are always my favorite. You did an excellent job on this chapter..I love how Edmund speaks french sometimes..so romantic :XO: imo! I can't wait to see what happens next!

    Bravo! 8)

  7. Trista says:

    -Love- the intro picture! This story is turning out great, and this chapter was well worth the wait. :) :XO:

  8. E. Black says:

    Absolutely beautiful, Kara. I was happy to see this on my RSS feeds. <3
    The outtakes are delicious.

  9. Trina says:

    Great chapter! I just know that when/if these two get together, it will be incredibly HOT! The header shots are proof enough of that…

  10. Eva says:

    Oh no! Now she knows his secret. However…I doubt this will keep her away. This only makes it harder for him, though…he seemed so defeated, it was sad to read. This was beautifully written…the emotions that she felt were readily expressed in the your beatifully crafted sentences.

  11. Kara says:

    Thank you, everyone! This was an extremely hard chapter for me to Sim since it relies heavily on conveying emotion and it's hard to get the Sims to do that convincingly–especially when it comes to drama and not comedy–so I'm ecstatic that you all are enjoying it. You guys are the best! :D

  12. Shelby says:

    Wow – this is really getting good! Can't wait to see what happens next – these two seem destined to be together but detirmined to make it as painful as possible getting there. And where do you get all those wonderful clothes?!? The header shots are fantastic!

  13. jenny says:

    Kara, that update was beautiful…..I am just about speechless…..

  14. Shera says:

    Кara you're the best too!) This chapter so…emotional and…full of something that I can't explain/ But it was brilliant. It's pitty but I don't understant french (( And I don't understand what Edmond says. (
    Keep waiting for another chapter ;)

  15. Kara says:

    I'm so glad you all are enjoying it! Phew! This one was hard for me to to post and I was so paranoid about it.

    It's not so important that you understand Edmond as that you notice that, in his distress, he's reverted back to his native language. However, if you're curious about what Edmond says when he pleads with Emily in French (as I would be! haha), here's the translation:

    • "Je vous en supplie! Laissez moi tranquille."
      I am begging you! Leave me alone.
    • "Allez-vous en immédiatement!"
      Go now!
  16. Shera says:

    Kara, I so glad that you ungerstand my bad English))) Thank you for translation. I like to lern something new about all languages)
    Yes I notice that ) And in makes Edmond more reall)
    Good Luck )

  17. Reyoko says:

    Oh my… 8O

    I was expecting in one of the chapters, sooner or later that Emily would be bitten by Edmond. It wouldn't be much of a vampire story if he didn't, but… this chapter sent my heart racing in every page! Every paragraph! Saying it would be amazing isn't enough! And even though I understood only a little of the french (the rest I guessed) it suited each paragraph so precisely I think I might just faint!

    To see Edmond lose control as much as he did was… breath-taking. ::-*: I don't even know what to expect anymore. The story has turned in a way I cannot predict, nor do I want to. I enjoyed it so much and I'm SO sorry my comment is like, seriously late but… oh my gosh! :o I'm just going to die now! Bye!

  18. Kara says:

    Oh, no, Reyoko! Please don't die! ;) And thank you so much! :XO: Next chapter will delve more into Edmond's psyche and P.O.V.

  19. Gayl says:

    OMG…well I am really surprised that Edmond managed to reign himself in before he went too far in biting Emily. That really surprised me although it shouldn't have. He certainly found her in a most inopportune time. And now I am curious over the aftershocks this will cause not only for him but for Emily as well.

    Your descriptions of their emotions was perfection. I could really feel her utter fear and helplessness as well as Edmond's anguish. I really don't think this will be the last that he sees of Emily. I doubt she is going to let this go. And if her father finds out what happened…that won't be pretty…

  20. Reyoko says:

    Ooooh~ ::-*: About time! Heheh. Any chance of an appearance of that roughishly handsome man from France? :wink:

  21. Kara says:

    Thank you, Gayl! You have Tahlvin pegged. I definitely wouldn't want to stand between him and Edmond if he ever found out what Edmond did to his little girl. ;)

    Reyoko, Rafe will once again make an appearance later in the story. I promise. :)

  22. Reyoko says:

    Oooh! :XO: I can hardly wait! Finally!

  23. May says:

    tranquill => tranquille!
    Au plaisir de t'aider!

  24. kiwi says:

    Oh wow I love this story o.o Edmond is such an amazing character: so conflicted by emotions, trying to be strong, yet sometimes giving way to despair. I think you captured the emotions very well! And the pictures are, as usual, beautiful. I should not have read this right before coming to tell you my news >.< But I have decided to just break down and make a SimsStory. I have quite a bit of it done and the first update will be around January 4th, and I am so nervous :o … and yet I am so excited…
    And now that I know what a pain in the butt it is, I wanted to compliment you some more on the way you capture so much emotion in your stories! Now more than ever, you amaze me. :XO: Keep writing!

  25. jacqueline says:

    i loved this chapter, it was really good. I can't wait to read the next one. && I love the other headers they all look nice, i can see it probably took a while for you to decide.

  26. Kara says:

    May:Thank you for pointing out the typo. I've fixed it.

    Kiwi: Awesome! I look forward to reading it! :)

    Jacqueline: I actually had to have my sister help me pick out the header since I couldn't choose myself. :P

  27. soleil says:

    I could help you too for your french if you wanted… cause I am french :) ouioui c'est bien vrai! Anyhoo, your story is AMAZING !!

  28. Kara says:

    soleil: Merci! I'm glad you're liking the story so far. I didn't realize I had so many French readers. Yay! :D

  29. Shera says:

    ((( Where is the next chapter ?((

  30. Stitches says:

    Ohmigosh. I love this story. I think your ability to build sets and pose the sims naturally is probably the most impressive I've seen.

    Did you make the dress Emily is wearing in the preview shot?

  31. Kara says:

    Shera: I'm slowly working on it. It's a difficult chapter and I haven't had much time to devote to it.

    Stitches: Thank you so much! :) Emily's gorgeous dress is by Sherahbim.

  32. Stephanie says:

    You're awesome dude, seriously just…. awesome at writing this8O !!!
    Anyway, I hope the writing is coming out smoothly:-) , as I'm reeeally looking forward to reading the next chapter:wink: !!!
    Good luck, soldier:idea: !

  33. paganpoetry says:

    I'm truly amazed with this story, I love the way you describe so strong scenes and characters with both amazing words and pictures! :? :up: I'll stay tuned for more, and I can't wait for this! :-)

    And may I ask you which skintones are Emily and Edmond sporting? I guessed Tahlvin's skintone was one from Enayla, did I guess right?

    Anyway, keep on the gorgeous job! :XO:

  34. Kara says:

    paganpoetry: Thank you! Yes, you're correct. Tahlvin does use a version of Enayla's skin (I edited it heavily though). Emily wears the same skin as Tahlvin, just the female version. And Edmond…hmm…I can't remember but you can download it with this sim (the sim that Edmond is based on).

  35. CharlieRayne says:

    You are incredible, most vampire stories bore me by now because the storyline's too monotone, but yours is so different from all the others that I can't help but sit here a little sad that there's not a chapter more.

    Anyway, where did you get Emily's shirt? I'm pretty sure the pants are from Clup Crimson, but I looove that shirt :XO: … please tell me where you got it :halo:

  36. Kara says:

    CharlieRayne: Thank you so much! I love vampire stories, but I'm trying to do a little different spin on mine. I'll be working on the new chapter soon. Right now, I'm finishing up a story I did with my ball-joint dolls.

    Emily's sweater and jacket were done by me. The sweater is a texture by Aikea_Guinea (of Club Crimsyn) and the jacket takes textures from the Maxis leather jacket. If you'd like, I can upload it for you.

  37. Trina says:

    Kara – if you do decide to upload that outfit I will definitely be downloading!

  38. Anelle says:

    Ooh I'm loving your story through and through! You're a wonderful story-teller and I adore your characters! Very lovely-written every chapter! Keep it coming and stay awesome! :-)

    Ah yeah…one more thing, how did you work on putting tears and blood on your sim? I know, honestly, I'm kind of a beginner. Also, I can't find any more working sites having that kind of costume make-up… :( can you help me?

  39. Flo says:

    Superb.
    Une Histoire magnifique, un très beau travail.
    On en veux encore et encore.
    A quand la suite avec les sims 2 ?

  40. Kara says:

    Flo: Merci beaucoup! I will eventually be coming back to the Sims 2 to work on this story. The Sims 3 has been distracting me lately though. :)

 

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